Fiction Friday – 21st January

 The prompt for today from Write Anything is: Your character  realises that someone they admire is imperfect. I’ve used the same characters this week as I did last week – Madison and Lucy from the YA novel I started during NaNo last year ‘The Dating Project.’ (remember it’s unedited)

‘What did you say?’

‘I said she’s a stupid little ho-bag.’

‘Ho bag?’

‘Yeah, like a tart. Slut. You know?’ Madison nodded. She wasn’t asking for an explanation of Lucy’s terminology (although that was weird), but she couldn’t believe Lucy was slating someone.

Ok so she’d only met her two days before, but up until then, she’d been so nice to everyone and about everyone. Madison had really started to look up to her. But now she was calling someone a ho-bag? Some that she used to be best friends with? It shocked Madison.

‘We are talking Sarah Greenwood aren’t we?’ Madison had to clarify. She hadn’t heard the whole story of why Sarah wasn’t best friends with Lucy and Emily any longer, but where Madison came from a friend was for life, whether they stayed best friends, or moved on to other friends. Mind you, Madison came from a tiny little town an hour or so outside of Texas, there were only 10 kids there around her age, so you had to be friends with everyone, or you’d be friends with no one.

‘Yeah. I mean it’s not like I care about Josh any more. And I know he doesn’t care about me. But parading around in front of me with him? That’s just slack. I wouldn’t do that with what’s his name? Dirt bag ugly guy from the garage down the road?’

‘Derek!’

Madison nearly jumped a mile as Emily came round the side of the wall her and Lucy had been sat on. They were on the edge of the playing field, and the sun was out so there was lots of noise – boys playing football; girls sunbathing in the early autumn sun, music blaring from someone’s phone; a few first years running round, probably playing kiss chase or something.

‘Jeez Em, you’ll give a girl a heart attack creeping up on her like that.’ Lucy took the words right out of Madison’s mouth. As Em sat down on the opposite side of Lucy to Madison, Madison tried to stop this negative feeling she was having. She felt it whenever Emily was around. She was quite sure she didn’t like her, but couldn’t work out why? Madison had gone out of her way to be nice to her – she was the new girl, of course she was going to be. But Em treated her like a great aunt or something, politely and not getting too close. Maybe they just needed some one to one time to get to know each other.

‘So you’re talking about Sarah then?’ Emily asked.

‘Yeah. Can you believe the little bitch?’

‘You know I actually can. I always thought she liked Josh. He obviously doesn’t like her, it’s just a way of getting back at you.’ Lucy scrapped her toe along the ground, kicking at the long grass with every swing.

‘You think?’

‘Defo. Look. He’s going to get over this whole break up thing. I’ve said it before and I’ll say it again: you were really good friends before you got together, once he gets over the hurt of rejection he’ll want to be friends again.’

‘And what do I…?

‘And until then you stay strong. Ignore him when he’s being a dick. Ignore that fat cow Sarah – she’s nothing on you. Soon, very soon, he’ll stop the nasty comments, he’ll stop hanging off other girls in front of you, and everyone will be able to get back to normal.’ 

Madison had to give it to Emily, although she pretty much ignored Madison when she could, she was a really good friend to Lucy, saying just what she needed to hear.

Madison looked up at the guy walking across the field in the far distance. Even from this distance she knew it was Josh and her heart knew it too. It started beating double time and her legs felt weak. She looked back over to Lucy who was now reading something on her cell phone, and tried to slow down her heart and gain the strength back in her legs. Lucy may have dumped Josh, but she sure wasn’t over him. And Madison wasn’t the kind of girl to jump in where another girl left off. Especially not someone as nice as Lucy. Because even though she’d discovered Lucy wasn’t a saint, she was still a really nice girl, and, Maidson hoped, a great friend.

Writing this was quite interesting – the novel is written in Lucy’s first person, so I’ve not really explored Madison’s thoughts too much, and definitely hadn’t put into words how she feels about Emily and Josh. I’m now wondering if I should write more from Madison’s POV. Although as she’s American and I’m English, I might find it pretty hard.

Anyway, I’m digressing. What did you think? I know I went away from the prompt, but I just got carried away. Don’t you love it when that happens? Please let me know what you think, good and bad comments welcome.

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3 thoughts on “Fiction Friday – 21st January

  1. A cool set up with these characters. I think you’ve got the dialogue sounding natural and appropriate.
    Adam B @revhappiness

  2. Excellent piece. I like the way you’ve managed an authentic voice in both characters. Not easy to do for that age group. Admirable work. Bravo

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